Tuesday, November 3, 2015

space in my heart

there's a space in my heart
where you should've fit in
that your perfect hands
should have colored all in

there's a gap in my mind
where our memories should be
instead there's a shadow
through which i can't see

there's a place in my hand
that is waiting for you
for fingers to intertwine
for a ring to fit too

there's a searching in my eyes
for a face i'll never see
for a face that will never
be searching for me


something kinda new here..last time i did something slightly like this people said they wanted more so here we are?
i actually didn't write this intending on posting it. i was just writing in the middle of some psychology homework when i was having some feels apparently... so how do you feel? ^-^

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  2. That is beautiful, is there a story behind it?

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    1. Thanks so much!!! Not really... I've been feeling these things recently, but not in the way that I wrote it.

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  3. WOW THE FEELS.

    I have felt all of this before. So many times, actually.

    I LOVE IT SO MUCH. JUST WOW OKAY. WOW.

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    1. GAH THANKS SO MUCH IM SO GLAD YOU CAN RELATE <3333

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  4. THIS OH MY. I think this would be absolutely beautiful if it was added to a song <3 Not that it isn't already PERFECTION

    ~Noor

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    1. aggghhhh that would be amazing. too bad i'm not a songwriter in any sense of the word xD thank you so much noor!!!!!!!!!!!

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  5. i feel that its special and close to your heart.
    and makes it beautiful

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    1. it's not strictly from personal experience i kind of twisted the surrounding experiences but it is still close to my heart. thank you evelyn :')

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    1. YOU'RE BOOTIFUL ASLDKFJ THANK YOU SO MUCH <3

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  7. This is wonderful!! You have a gift, and this truly spoke to my heart! Thank you for sharing!!!

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    1. aw, i'm so glad <3 thank you for your comment nicola!

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  8. This is really beautiful! I agree, you should do more of these!
    -Vanessa

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    1. thanks, vanessa!<3 i'll keep that in mind ;)

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  9. Charming with a haunting note! I always like to end things on a hopeful note, but this poem makes sense in my soul, if that makes sense! Lovely, though.

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    1. Thank you! I usually do too, I felt a little bad leaving it on that note but oh well ;)

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    1. THANK YOU SO MUCH GRACE. <3
      giving people beautiful feels is all that I was aspiring to writing this, so your comment made me feel really good ;)

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  11. This is BEE-YOU-TI-FULLL wow. Seriously, I am loving this. The story is so poignant and raw and real but so so simple. You wrote it so real. :) I have wonderfully sad and whimsical and melancholy feels in all the right places.

    (also, thanks for stopping by my blog!! Definitely twinsies! haha)

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    1. AGH THANK YOU. Wow those were the perfect compliments you just made. Like all I aspire to.
      "poignant raw real simple and sad whimsical melancholy feels" GAH. you sure know how to make someone feel good about their writing. ;) Thanks for stopping by, Liv <3 (ps do people call you that? I feel like I need to know. hahaha)

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  12. I honestly can't believe I didn't comment on this and I thought I did.

    BUT OH GOODNESS. These are the things I feel with jitters in my stomach for no apparent reasons. The moon still shines and the sun gently floats across the sky and I find that...it's okay. Because you do not need another to be whole, though they are a gift. ♥♥♥ Precious words, Livvy dear. *grins*

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    1. YOUR COMMENTS ARE ALWAYS SO SWEET GAH ♥♥♥
      thanks for stopping by cally it always makes me happy :')

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  13. This is really beautiful, and the last stanza is a dream!

    Noire Beau

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    1. Ahhhh thanks so much!♥♥♥ Can't wait to check out your blog!

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